COMPARISON of CAVOUR and BISMARCK
Otto Von Bismarck:
He was a man of power! He worked for the king of Prussia. He united all of Germany under one rule, the rule of the king of Prussia, who then after the unification became known as Kaiser of Germany.
Camillo Benso, conte di Cavour:
Worked for the king of Piedmont-Sardinia. He was the prime minister. He with the help of the king's troops, the French king and some other Italian nationalists, unified almost all of Italy, his successor finished his job.
They were both great men, in their own way. Nationalism was in their blood.
They had a few similarities. For example, both were monarchists, whom worked for a king, and wanted things to stay that way. And both believed in realpolitik, they way of politics where the diplomacy and ruling was based primarily on practical considerations, rather than ideological notions, and the good of the government went over the well being of the people. They were both very good diplomats and were both in a quest to unify their country.
Also they both worked for another noble. They both disliked nationalists who asked for a republic or communism. Bismarck tried to destroy all socialist groups but failed, although he did keep them hidden enough. Where as Cavour was forced to work with them, but in the end the nation still became what Cavour had wanted it to become... A monarchy.
But they had very many differences.
Cavour- unlike Bismarck –was not seen in the public too much. He didn’t keep as many speeches as Bismarck, and also he wasn’t liked by the people as much.
Whereas Cavour had a problem with the people, Bismarck had them eating from his hands. They thought of him as a hero! Bismarck had no trouble taking troops and taking over areas, whereas Cavour seemed to have a problem just to get rid of one person (Garibaldi.) Bismarck relied on cold steel and blood, but Cavour would hide from the public and make diplomatic deals. Where Bismarck had the help of Austria to defeat France, Cavour had the help of France to defeat Austria.
These two people were almost total opposites. And Cavour never even succeeded it was his successor whom did.
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Hi LordAnzius,
Mailice here with a short review!
At first glance, this seems like a good juxtaposition of Bismarck and Cavour. I have to be honest, Cavour is definitely a bit more unknown to me than Bismarck, and I don't know about others either, but at least some brief notes on the dates of his life, such as birth and death, as well as some relevant key dates would have been handy, so that a reader can also better prepare for this essay.
I like the way you have structured the essay though, describing both a little briefly and also creating transitions. I think that would certainly be good, (I'm not sure if that would work here on YWS) but to make it seem like a table so that you can present that overview better. But I think it's great how you've formulated everything there and how you've described some things there.
Some things don't come across as directly neutral, though, and I think with an essay it's important to keep a neutral stance at least in the juxtaposition and the main part before you form your own opinion at the end. I also think that the ending here is a bit abrupt and you could certainly expand on some points there.
On the other hand, I really like that you also introduced Camilla Benso, because you made me curious to get an insight into Italian history. (Hence, for example, the key dates, which are certainly important).
It also seems to me that you didn't include some information that is certainly relevant to the theme of commonalities, such as Bismarck's attempt to unite the small German states, that he caused the Franco-Prussian War with a document he forged, and that all in order to make a German Empire out of these small states (and Prussia).
Have fun writing!
Mailice
I must admit I have no idea who Cavour and Bismarck are, therefore I would begin this with a description of both men before beginning your essay on them.
In my opinion, it's not the best way to start. It's too abrupt, perhaps if you add a description first it will flow more.
Do you have any examples of these? It's always best to back-up your points with examples.
Very good sentence, it includes an example too. my one point is that this sentence 'He didn’t keep as much speeches' should read 'He didn’t keep as many speeches'.
Should be 'whereas'.
This sentence is fairly formal, consider using more formalised language in this essay.
A nice snappy conclusion.
Overall, an interesting essay, I would just expand it a little bit by developing your points, consider your audience, it seems a little informal right now, maybe you intended it to be, but I would make it a little more formalised at points. Interesting subject though